This week we had to make up a story about the girl in the video we also had to pick a theme my theme was mysterious, if you want to watch the video its called sometimes the star my story is about a girl who ran away from home, i hope you like it :)
Hey Neisha! Thanks for sharing your writing! Perhaps you could think about formatting your writing so it makes it easier to read. Keep up the great blogging though!
Hello Neisha, It's Arielle, from T3. I think your narrative writing is really good. I like how you used metaphors and how you descried things specifically. I also like how the story builds up with suspense. Maybe next time you can change the set up of the writing on your blog so it is more clear and easier to read. other than that i think you did an amazing job. - Arielle
Hey Neisha! Thanks for sharing your writing! Perhaps you could think about formatting your writing so it makes it easier to read. Keep up the great blogging though!
ReplyDeleteHello Neisha, It's Arielle, from T3.
ReplyDeleteI think your narrative writing is really good.
I like how you used metaphors and how you descried things specifically.
I also like how the story builds up with suspense.
Maybe next time you can change the set up of the writing on your blog so it is more clear and easier to read.
other than that i think you did an amazing job.
- Arielle